Hello guys,
I am just writing the advantages and disadvantages of the tourism in paragraph 1,
and then advantages and disadvantages of the manufacturing sector in paragraph 2.
Need we say some thing about the conclusion "which one bring more benefits to the country"?
Because the task is only two body paragraphs writing, i am not sure where I can give the conclusion.
Do you have any ideas please? Thanks!
Regards
Angela
Hello, Angela.
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure too, but just in my opinion, it's depend on your thesis statement.
---- your thesis statement : there are advantages and disadvantages ----
You shouldn't write which is more better or worse.
or
You should write which is more better or worse in your concluding paragraph.
---- your thesis statement : tourism bring more benefits to the country ----
Your body paragraph of the tourism is longer(stronger) than the manufacturing's one.
and
You have to write that the tourism is the best or better sector in your concluding paragraph.
---- your thesis statement : manufacturing bring drawback to the country ----
Your body paragraph of the manufacturing is longer(stronger) than the tourism's one.
and
You have to write that the manufacturing is the worst or worse sector in your concluding paragraph.
Sorry, I say again it's just my opinion.
Thanks Miyuki.
DeleteYou are really a kind hearted girl, thanks for giving me a lot of advices.
I am just writing that there are advantages and disadvantages, I am trying to balance them for each subject.
Actually, every thing has the both side effect, so the reasonably use is the most important thing. In my opionion, there is incomparable between the different subject.
Hi Angela.
DeleteI understood your opinion that is "there are advantages and disadvantages".
You should write those in your concluding paragraph, but it isn't included Assignment2. v(^_^)v
I think that ok to put one more paragraph for conclusion.... i did it so ;)
ReplyDeletehope it will help ya Angela...
cheers
Irene